
Photo by Sonnische
Even with too much light
and too little contrast
nature’s beauty cannot be
completely quelled.
One still can hear
the swish of the gentle surf
and peeping of the sandpipers
dancing ahead of the waves.
Namasté
For The Daily Post
‘Nature’s beauty cannot be completely quelled’ > the patterned sounds within this, such as plosives in ‘beauty/be’, internal rhyme in ‘be/completely’ and alliteration in ‘completely/quelled’ are really lovely. I usually try to make my lines end on a significant word, which ‘be’ is perhaps not, however, I appreciate it if you were trying to enforce life into this ‘be’, emphasising the notion of ‘being’.
Thank you for your very thoughtful take on my poem! I will keep your wise suggestion about end words in mind.